The prevention of health problems is more important than treatment and medicine. Therefore, governments should spend more money on educating people about healthy lifestyles instead of curing illnesses. How far do you agree with this statement?

In recent years, there

has

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been growing concerns about

health

issues with some arguing that states should pay more attention

on

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prevention

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the prevention

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of illness,

while

others believe that treating diseases is the only way to stay healthy. In

this

essay

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i

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will explore my own point of view

of

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this

controversial issue. First and foremost,

health

is the most valuable aspect

in

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people's life. It is essential to avoid

health

problem

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in the

begining

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beginning

,

due to

this

there is no denying that government should allocate more financial resources to promote

healthy

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a healthy

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lifestyle.

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instance

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it is essential to encourage children for doing exercise. They boost

health

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the health

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of

adolescent

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and children and help them to be in good shape. Schools should incorporate in their curriculum, more subjects with physical activity

such

as football and basketball.

Furthermore

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it is important to educate people about healthy diets and distribute more information about

detrimental

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the detrimental

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effect

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effects

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of junk food

such

as fast food and

high sugar

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drinks.

On the other

hand

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there

are

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some

sickness

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sicknesses

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which

require

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only treatment like

phisician

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physical

physician

trauma,

bone

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and bone

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fractures. In

this

case

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curing is

a

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solely

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way to save a life. Undoubtedly, in

this

situations

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is crucial that

national

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the national

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healthcare system is equipped well to help the population. In conclusion,

it is clear that

prevention of illness is significantly important in today's world because it provides people to live happy and

fulfilment

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life and

i

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firmly opine with

this

statement.

However

government

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the government

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should keep in mind about

existance

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existence

of various

illnes

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illness

which can't

be prevent

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.