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You live on the fourth floor of a five-storey building which is not equipped with an elevator (lift). Write a letter to your neighbors and in your letter • introduce yourself • say what the problem is • ask the neighbors to agree on the installation of an elevator.

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Dear Sir or Madam, The reason why I am addressing you is that I have been living in
building
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the building
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 which is not equipped with
on
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an
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elevator
. In order to solve the problem he should coordinate with his
neighours
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neighbours
 and install a left. I am 20 and
working
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a working
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 teacher. I am living building which
a
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is a
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five story. I live on the fourth floor of
this
 building
that
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in
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room 24. I have been living
since
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for
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 15 years. The main reason I am applying
that
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is that
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 the building has
not
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no
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 lift.
Duo
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Due
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 to the lack of
ana
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an
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elevator
 , old people and young children have a hard time going up to the third , fourth and
fiv
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five
 floors.
As a result
of
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, they are losing
thier
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their
 time.
Moreover
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Moreover,
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 people in
this
 building are
stituggling
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struggling
 to bring furniture and food to
thier
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their
 homes. And
then
 We have to agree with all the
neighbors
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 in the building about installing a left. All expenses for the
elevator
 will be shared with our
neightbors
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neighbours
 in the building and given to the
elevator
 service centre.
Your
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 Sincerely Tom.
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task achievement
You need to provide more concise and clear information, avoiding repetition and unnecessary details.
coherence cohesion
Improve your grammar and spelling to ensure your message is clear and easy to understand.
coherence cohesion
Review the paragraph structure to ensure each paragraph clearly addresses a single idea.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear start with an introduction and ends with a proper closing, which is good for coherence.
task achievement
The tone of the letter remains polite and respectful, which is suitable for the context.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Introduce, rapport, difficulties, transport, groceries, furniture, accessibility, elderly, disabilities, benefits, installation, accessibility, property value, organizing, logistics, community, quality of life, support, impact, contribute, gauge interest
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