Write a letter to a colleague who is hospitalized at the moment. In your letter you should • ask about his/her health • let him/her know what changes occurred since he/she has been hospitalized • also try to make him/her happy in some ways

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Hello dear Mubina, I am very sad to realise that your

hospitalized

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were hospitalized

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for so long. It seems like that our office is getting smaller and smaller. I am very considered

to know

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in knowing

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about your health condition. Hope that you will join us as soon as possible. Just let me know if you feel worse. There

has

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been many changes since you got hospitalized.

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, Mr. Johnson's wife gave birth to a very pretty baby girl. I am going to become the lead- economist in Karshi.

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Mrs. Rasulova got fired due

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to the

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layoff at work.

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I have good news for you! Your position has been promoted to office manager.I congratulate you on your salary increase

along with

the position of general manager. I am sure that

this

news will make you happy. I believe that you will soon recover and return to our group. Warm regards, Emila.

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Try to provide more specific details about the health inquiry to show genuine concern.

coherence cohesion

Ensure each paragraph covers a distinct topic to improve clarity and coherence.

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Review for grammatical errors and stylistic improvements to enhance readability.

task achievement

You have effectively included all the requested information in your letter: inquiry about health, mentioning changes, and delivering happy news.

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The tone of your letter is friendly and encouraging, which is suitable for the context.

Word Count

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Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

148 words

5.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Write a letter to a colleague who is hospitalized at the moment. In your letter you should • ask about his/her health • let him/her know what changes occurred since he/she has been hospitalized • also try to make him/her happy in some ways

Word Count

More and more people are shifting to a plant-based diet. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

living in a country where you have a speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Some people believe that online learning is very effective for students and that they can learn more easily than in the classroom while other people believe studying in a classroom with other students is much better. Which group do you agree with? Why?