The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012.

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The graph illustrates variations in the kinds of illegal behaviour in the middle of Manchester City in the

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period to 2012. I will describe the aspects of these types of stealing and make suggestions about reducing types of crime depending

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point of

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view

. From the diagram

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we can see the variations in three kinds of criminal

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during

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2003 to 2012 in Manchester City Centre. Burglary and

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theft

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higher

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substantially higher than robbery because those two

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higher than 2000 but the green line

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under 1000. Stealing cars and stealing from people are stable. You can see in the graph

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two are stable but robbing is four

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higher but in 2012

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theft

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where as

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robbery just

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over 500 but still less than 1000.

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burglary and

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are the most serious problems

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, we need to think about other points of view. Stop

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robbery- someone

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the robber

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robber

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to use violence to rob

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innocent people. stop

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number per

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at first burglary is higher but it

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to drop down but stealing

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start to get higher

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each

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. My own opinion is that we should focus on controlling

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each

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to get higher and higher.

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