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The chart above shows the number of people visiting museums in London in the 5 months in 2021.

The chart above shows the number of people visiting museums in London in the 5 months in 2021.
#people #museums #london #months
The bar chart illustrates the number of
people
visited
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who visited
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 museums in
United
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the United
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 Kingdom in the 5 months
in
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of
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 2021.
Overall
 it is noticeable that ,
highest
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the highest
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 number for the British museum .
In contrast
 ,
lowest
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the lowest
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 number of
people
 for
National
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the National
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museum
Capitalize word
Museum
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. In the
month
Fix the agreement mistake
months
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 of June and July , over 400,000
people
 visited ,
increase
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increasing
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 drastically following
month
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the month
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August
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of August
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 to 600,000 and
dropped
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dropping
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 to below 300,000 in September and December respectively. On
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the
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other hand ,
National
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in National
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 museums, below 200,000
people
 visit in the 4 months .
Scince
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Science
 museum
have
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has
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fluctuation over four months ,
starts
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starting
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 with around 400,1000 visits in June slightly
decrease
Wrong verb form
decreasing
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following
Correct article usage
the following
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 month and
remained
Wrong verb form
remaining
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 unchanged in July and August with 400 000 . And grew upto 500 000 in September , decline to 300 000 in December.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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