The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart
illustrate
Change the verb form
illustrates
number
of people employed in different Change the article
a number
the number
field
of work both men and Fix the agreement mistake
fields
women
in Australia last
year .
Overall
, it is clearly noticeable that ,
females Remove the comma
apply
has
Change the verb form
have
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
employed
in clerical and males in Replace the word
employees
Tradespeople
.Lowest Correct article usage
the Tradespeople
women
in the Production and tradesperson.
To begin
with managers , they
are 600 000 male employees and just 200 000 Correct pronoun usage
there
in
female , followed by Change preposition
apply
Professional
between 600 000 and 700 000 Fix the agreement mistake
Professionals
among
both.Semi-professional above 500 000 in Change preposition
apply
mens
and below 400 000 in Correct your spelling
men's
men
women
's.
Tradespeople are highest among all kinds of job for men with 900 0000 .and women
in clerical just below 1000 000 .On the other hand
,least
employees are girls in Tradespeople and production with 100 000 respectively.Labour and production Correct article usage
the least
job
Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
has
550 000 and 400 000 respectively.Below 300 000 female employees worked in labour .Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
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