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You bought a TV a week ago but when you got home you discovered it did not work properly. You called customer service to report the problem but you have not yet received any help. Write a letter to the company and in your letter: • introduce yourself • explain the problem • and state what action you would like from the company

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Dear Manager, I am Jagtheesan Manoharan. I am writing
this
 letter in regard to the purchase I made a week ago on Tuesday 22nd of April. I bought a GRE brand
television
 with a 65-inch screen for 800$. Your team delivered it to my home on the same day evening and I appreciate your quick, efficient and reliable service.
However
, when I plugged it into the outlet. It was working fine for a few minutes and suddenly the video and audio began to distort. I shut down the
television
 and tried to turn it on again. The
television
 turned on but the screen remained distorted and the sound was completely absent. I bought
this
 as a birthday gift for my father. I am totally disappointed by
this
 outcome. I believe that I am still within the return period
along with
 an extended warranty coverage. I request you to assess the condition of my
television
 and help me to find a new one without any faulty system. I want you to arrange a delivery from my home to your store for my return and
also
 deliver a new one without any additional charges. In the future please make sure that these kinds of mistakes don't repeat. I have been a long-term customer for your company and
this
 was the first time I came across
this
 problem. Thanks for understanding my situation and sending me a new
television
 as soon as possible. Thanks, Jag
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