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The table shows the proportion of women in the labour force and women in management in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the proportion of women in the labour force and women in management in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates the accumulation of
women
 who
working
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work
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 in the
Labour
Force
 compared to
woman
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women
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 in
The
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apply
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Management
 in five different nations shown in
percentage
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percentages
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.
Overall
, it is completely clear that the number of
women
 who
working
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work
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 in the
Labour
Force
 mostly
surppassed
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surpassed
women
 who
working
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work
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 behind
desk
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desks
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. Interestingly, Sri
Langka
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Lanka
 has the lowest percentage of
Women
 in
Management
 compared to any other means of nations mentioned.
To begin
 with, Australia and the United States have the biggest number of
women
 who
working
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work
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 in both sectors, about 42% and 46% for
Labour
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the Labour
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Force
sector
 respectively, and
similarly
 contribute around 43% in both
country
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countries
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 for
Management
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the Management
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sector
. Egypt, Sri Lanka and Japan
has
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have
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 the lowest contribution of
worker
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workers
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 in the
Management
sector
, with just below 17%. Apparently,
Labour
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the Labour
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Force
 is the most popular working
sector
 in Sri Lanka, and only 9% of
women
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are insterested
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insterested
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interested
working
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in working
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 in
Management
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the Management
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sector
 there.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, labour, force, management, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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