You recently bought some train tickets for a journey a week in advance. When you went to the station to catch the train, you were told you could not use the tickets and the staff were very unhelpful to you. Write a letter to the train company. In your letter • describe the problem you had with the tickets • say why you were unhappy with the staff • suggest what action the train company should take

Dear Sir, I hope
this
letter finds you well. I am Lahiru Maduranga, I am living in Clyde north suburb and I am writing
this
letter to lodge a complaint regarding my ticket issue and the unhelpful staff.
This
incident happened
on
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last
friday
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(20/04/2024) at Berwick station. I
have
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planned my journey on week before and I bought online tickets as well(13/04/2024).
According to
the
schedule
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I reached the station in time. When I went to the ticket counter, the officer who checked the tickets said that
this
ticket
is
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not valid. I questioned
about
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the reason and he did not reply
me
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.
Furthermore
, I was disappointed with the situation I faced. At least, I expected a reasonable justification from the ticketing officer. I was waiting
such
a long time to sort out
this
matter, but nobody assisted me.
This
was the main reason I was unhappy with the staff.
Moreover
, I suggest you
to
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look into
this
matter and kindly do the necessary refund. Meanwhile, I appreciate
if
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you could educate the staff on customer care essentials.  I am waiting for
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immediate action and a reply letter from you in
this
regard. Your's Sincerely, Lahiru Maduranga
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure to use varied sentence structures to enhance readability.
Task Achievement
Use punctuation appropriately, especially when dealing with dates to ensure clarity.
Task Achievement
Try to maintain a consistent formal tone throughout the letter for consistency.
Task Achievement
The letter effectively conveys the problem with the tickets and the issue encountered with the staff.
Coherence and Cohesion
The organisation of ideas into paragraphs is well done, aiding the letter's logical flow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • disappointed
  • inconvenience
  • frustrated
  • incompetent
  • unhelpful
  • inconsiderate
  • ruined
  • compensation
  • refund
  • apology
  • reimbursement
  • improvement
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