the diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea

the diagram below shows two different processes for manufacturing black tea
The chart presents two varying ways
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producing black
tea
.
Overall
, the process has
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9 stages, starting with harvesting the
tea
leaves to frying the rolled leaves. 
To begin
with, the
tea
leaves must be picked off, it is important that only bud and 2 top leaves
to
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be chosen for
this
. Following that, the
tea
leaves are placed on a rack and withered by a fan to keep the moisture out after which the process splits
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two methods of production, traditional where leaves are rolled flat
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so that enzymes
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be released from them or the modern method where the leaves are cut into smaller
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granular
granules
granule
pieces. 
The next step is
oxidation/fermentation where rolled leaves are left on cement so that they
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change their colour to copper
due to
the enzymes in the air. The
last
step is that copper leaves are left in the ovens and fired, releasing flavour and aroma and keeping 97% of
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tea with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional method
  • CTC method
  • Manufacturing process
  • Withering
  • Rolling
  • Fermentation
  • Drying
  • Sorting
  • Crushing
  • Tearing
  • Curling
  • Quality
  • Flavor
  • Aroma
  • Technology advancements
  • Environmental considerations
  • Consumer preference
  • Pricing
  • Tea grade categorization
  • Market implications
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