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You have recently read a book about a city you know well and found some incorrect information. Write a letter to the author. Yell him/her of the incorrect information. Give him/her the correct information. Explain why they should correct it.

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Dear Author, I am writing to you to inform you about some incorrect information in your newly published book related to the
city
 of Yazd. Recently, I bought a book about the
city
 of Yazd, my hometown, and I have found some wrong information about the ancient towers and castles which are located in the traditional part of the
city
. I am wondering how
this
 false data is passed to you. I suppose you should review the stories associated with the origins of these historical sites and refine most of them. You can find accurate information in the
encyclopedia
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Encyclopedia
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 of
tourism
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Tourism
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 in Iran
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was published by the official sources in 1999, you can
also
 find an electronic copy of it in the National Library of Iran. As I have noticed, your stories may be harmful to the reputation of my
city
, especially that part in which the aforementioned buildings are located, and it can cause some detrimental effects on the tourism industry,
as a result
, the prosperity and the economy of people that are working in that area can negatively be affected. So, please act as soon as possible. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Best regards, M.Rezaeian
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Task Achievement
Ensure all statements or claims about factual inaccuracies are clear and specific to help the reader understand exactly what needs to be corrected.
Coherence & Cohesion
While your letter is well-structured, including a brief introduction of how you came across the book could enhance engagement.
Logical Structure
You have effectively organized your letter into paragraphs, each serving a clear purpose - informing the author of the inaccuracies, providing correct information, and explaining the potential negative impact.
Writing Tone
Your polite and respectful tone is well-suited to the context of writing to an author about a sensitive issue.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • courteous introduction
  • inaccurate information
  • pinpointing specifics
  • factual data
  • potential misconceptions
  • credibility
  • verifying
  • local expertise
  • respectful request
  • future editions
  • admiration
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