The chart shows the percentage of people in one country, by age group, who visited one or more museums in 2006, 2011 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of people in one country, by age group, who visited one or more museums in 2006, 2011 and 2016.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart compares the
proportion
of those who visited at least one museum in one nation by different
age
groups in 2006, 2011 and 2016.
Overall
, there are increasing rates of visitors from 25 to 34, 35 to 44 and 45 to 54
while
people from 55 to 64, who visited museums more than any other
age
groups in 2006 and 2011, are less likely to visit for the decade. There is not a significant change in the percentage of people between 15 and 24 and over 65 and the
proportion
of those over 65 remains lower throughout the examined periods. Starting with the graphs which show a constant change, the percentage of those from 25 to 34 experienced a steady growth with approximately 27% in 2006, 30% in 2011 and about 33% in 2016.
Furthermore
, another group with a more radical increase is the 35 to 44
age
group since the rate jumped from 20% in 2006 to 30% in 2011,
finally
reaching the top at above 35% in 2016.
In contrast
, there was a constant decrease in the
proportion
of those aged 45 to 54 since it declined gradually from 40% to 35% and just below 30% for the decade. Turning to the chart with inconsistent trends, the 15 to 24
age
group visited museums more in 2011 than in 2006 with a slight increase of around 2%.
However
, the rate dropped to reach the same level
of
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2006 at 25% in 2016. Regarding the graph of those aged 45 to 54, it only accounted for 20% in 2006
while
it rose in a dramatic way to reach 30% in 2011 and remained stable in 2016. Meanwhile, the
proportion
of those over 65 stayed relatively lower at around 20% with 2016 being the highest, followed by 2006 and 2011.
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