The diagram below shows the process of producing raisins from grapes. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram provides information about how raisins can be produced from grapes.
Overall
, Overall
, the process comprises a number of stages, starting with picking, through different mixing steps, and ending with the final products being distributed.
At the beginning of the process, grapes are harvested by farmers, after which they are arranged and dried under the sun. The result, which is collected raisins
, comes after from two to three weeks. Change preposition
from raisins
Subsequently
, these dried fruits are transported to a factory to continues
Wrong verb form
continue
its
production.
The process in the factory starts with cleaning and washing the product to remove excess dirt. Correct pronoun usage
their
Therefore
, the workers then
put the sanitized output into a sorter. This
machine can categorized
the input by size. Wrong verb form
categorise
This
step mark
the completion of the raisins' production and the final product is ready to be sold. It is Change the verb form
marks
then
packaged in small boxes used to be sold at grocery stores or larger boxes for commercial bakeries or export.Submitted by hainguyenviet1203 on
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