The diagram below shows the process of producing raisins from grapes. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of producing raisins from grapes.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram provides information about how raisins can be produced from grapes.
Overall
,
Overall
, the process comprises a number of stages, starting with picking, through different mixing steps, and ending with the final products being distributed. At the beginning of the process, grapes are harvested by farmers, after which they are arranged and dried under the sun. The result, which is collected
raisins
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, comes after from two to three weeks.
Subsequently
, these dried fruits are transported to a factory to
continues
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its
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production. The process in the factory starts with cleaning and washing the product to remove excess dirt.
Therefore
, the workers
then
put the sanitized output into a sorter.
This
machine can
categorized
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the input by size.
This
step
mark
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the completion of the raisins' production and the final product is ready to be sold. It is
then
packaged in small boxes used to be sold at grocery stores or larger boxes for commercial bakeries or export.
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