A friend of your is thinking of going om a camping holiday for the first time this summer . he has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday. -Describe some possible disadvantages. -Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer.

Dear friend, I am writing to you
this
letter in order to provide you with some useful advice I have learned from my previous experience in camping since I heard from our friend Ali that you are planning to go to a campaign
this
summer. I am pretty sure that you will never forget
this
enjoyable experience, as you will move from your daily routine activities to a new self-independent lifestyle.
Besides
that, you can not imagine the level of happiness you will reach when you wake up early morning
on
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spectacular natural sceneries and breathe fresh air or drink pure water.
However
, let me remind you of some essential items you should bring like wet wipes, a torch, a battery bank, a GPS device, insecticide, and
last
but not least the portable toilet. The only disadvantage that needs to be taken into account is that you will be exposed to a high level of risk if you don’t take care of yourself. Unfortunately,
due to
my earlier commitment to my family, I will not be able to join you on
this
wonderful journey, I wish you all the best and to return safely to your family as well. Truly yours,
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task response
Consider elaborating more on why your friend would enjoy camping, providing specific examples or personal anecdotes to strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices (e.g., linking words, pronouns) more effectively to ensure smoother transitions between ideas.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing are appropriate and set a friendly tone for the letter.
complete response
You addressed all parts of the task, providing advice, potential disadvantages, and a personal stance regarding joining your friend.
suitable writing tone
The letter maintains an appropriate and friendly tone throughout, suitable for writing to a friend.
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