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You missed an important meeting at work. Write a letter to your manager. In the letter: -apologize for not attending -explain why you did not attend -say what you will do to make up for it

#work #manager #-apologize #-explain #-say
Dear Mr,Saleem, I am writing
this
 epistle to express from the depth of my heart how sorry I am to have not attended the meeting. Honestly, I am feeling a bit down and want to tell you that I am terribly sorry, especially, because you already sent me a notification. I have been down in the dumps about my absence and beg your forgiveness. Without question, my actions deserve an explanation, and
thus
 I should have told you that I would not make it because my father had a very high fever,
Therefore
, I had to take him to the hospital.
However
, to heal any open wounds from my absence, I want to take the next turn of meeting responsibility. Even more,be sure the next meeting will amuse you a lot please accept my sincere apologies. Yours Faithfully, Raheel
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Coherence & Cohesion
For a higher score in coherence and cohesion, ensure each paragraph has a clear central theme and transitions smoothly to the next. While your letter generally follows a logical structure, slight refinement in connecting ideas could benefit the overall flow.
Task Achievement
In terms of task achievement, your letter adequately addresses all the points requested in the prompt. To further enrich your response, consider providing more detailed descriptions or specific actions you will take to make up for your absence, beyond just stating you will take responsibility for the next meeting.
Task Achievement
Your letter effectively apologizes, explains your absence, and offers a solution to make up for it, successfully meeting the task requirements.
Writing Tone
You maintained a respectful and appropriate tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for its context and purpose.
Greeting and Closing
Your conclusion with 'please accept my sincere apologies' is a strong closing statement that reinforces your apologetic tone and intent.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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