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An English speaking friend wants to spend a two-weeks holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice Write a letter to your friend. In your letter offer to find somewhere to stay give advice about what to do give information about what clothes to bring

#english #friend #holiday #region #information #advice #offer #clothes
Dear Timo, I'm writing
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to
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 response
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for
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 your letter asking
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for my
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my
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for my
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 advice for your trip
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in
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 Ho Chi Minh City next week. I hope you are well.
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i'll
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 suggest you Sofitel
hotel
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 which is a decent hotel
,
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with, reasonable
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reasonable
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a reasonable
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price
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prices
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variety
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a variety
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choices
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of choices
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 for breakfast.
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, the hotel is located near Ben Thanh market
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 you can find local cuisine and fresh juice as well. You can find some interesting historical sites
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 as the War Remnants or the People Commitee that you'll understand about Vietnam. What is more, you can go to
water
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 bus that they'll offer you a river tour. I bet you would love to
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experience it
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.
Finally
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 weather in Ho Chi Minh
city
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, you should bring a couple of T-shirts and shorts for your convenience. Don't forget to bring sandals and suncream. I hope you may find some good suggestions for your trip. Best regards, Emily
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Grammar
Ensure all verbs are correctly conjugated to maintain consistency and professionalism in your writing.
Spelling
Consider using a spell-check tool to catch any minor spelling mistakes for a polished final letter.
Vocabulary & Sentence Structure
Introduce more complex sentences and varied vocabulary to enhance the sophistication of your writing.
Structure & Clarity
You did an excellent job in structuring your letter, introducing each recommendation in separate paragraphs, which enhances the clarity and impact of your advice.
Tone & Engagement
Your friendly tone and personalized recommendations make your letter engaging and useful for your friend, effectively fulfilling the task's requirements.
Closing
You effectively closed the letter with wishes for a good trip, which is a nice touch that adds warmth to your message.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accommodation
  • Landmarks
  • Museums
  • Cuisine
  • Historical
  • Forecast
  • Layers
  • Umbrella
  • Sunscreen
  • Itinerary
  • Hospitality
  • Leisure
  • Sightseeing
  • Cultural
  • Atmospheric
  • Seasonal
  • Day trip
  • Local events
  • Guesthouse
  • Warm layers
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