The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
The diagram illustrates the
process
of moulding
glass
containers.
Overall
,
this
process
takes place through a total of 9 different steps, starting from melting the
glass
to processing it and
finally
packaging
them
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it
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for commercial use. The
process
starts with melting, in which a mixture of
glass
pieces
are
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is
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put into a furnace with a temperature of 105 degrees. The hot
glass
passes through a mould at stage 2, where it is pressed, after which it is put into a second mould which is a
thick walled
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container.
Moreover
completing the
process
of moulding. At stage 5, air is filled into the
glass
and in the subsequent step, the
glass
is put into a kiln at 482 degrees, after which, the
glass
is cooled at 25 degrees for an hour. The manufactured glasses are
then
sorted at step 8, where the poor quality ones go into the waste bin,
while
the good ones are packaged into a carton, finishing the entire
process
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words process, glass with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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