Write a 150 word letter to a family who are looking for some one to live with them and take care of six year old.

Dear Sir, I am writing

this

letter as I saw your advertisement in the Newspaper that you are looking forward to hiring a nanny to take care of your six-year-old son. I am wondering if

this

job is amazing for me

according to

my qualifications because I have a two-year diploma in caretaker from a well-known university in your area. Not only

this

butI

Correct your spelling

but I

but

also

have

a two-year experiences

Correct the article-noun agreement

a two-year experience

two-year experiences

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as a nanny where I took care of two siblings aged 4 and 6 respectively.

In addition

this

, since I lived with a family before as well, there would not be any issue and I am willing to live with you as I do not like to live alone in the apartments.

Also

, it is a plus point as I do not need to commute in the early morning to your place.

Nevertheless

, I am glad that I will get

this

opportunity again to take care of a young one. I am looking forward to your response and I would be thankful to you if you consider me the best fit for

this

work. Yours faithfully, Simran

Submitted by simranjot0002 on Thu May 02 2024

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task achievement

Provide more specific details about your qualifications and experience for stronger task achievement.

coherence cohesion

Consider using a variety of sentence structures to enhance the readability of your letter.

coherence cohesion

You have effectively used paragraphs to structure your letter, separating different ideas neatly.

task achievement

Your writing tone is appropriate and respectful for the task, contributing to a suitable impression.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

187 words

7.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Write a 150 word letter to a family who are looking for some one to live with them and take care of six year old.

The Greeting

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