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The graph shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island in the year 2010 and 2017

The graph shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island in the year 2010 and 2017
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The graph represents the number of
tourists
visting
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visiting
 a particular
Caribbean
island
 in the
year
 2010 to 2017. I will explain
about
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this
 chart in the following
paragaphs
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paragraphs
.
Overall
, the total number of
tourists
 has increased from
1million
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1 million
 in the
year
 2010 to
3.5million
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3.5 million
 in the
year
 2017 respectively.
Firstly
, there are two types of
tourists
visting
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visiting
 a
Caribbean
island
, they are
visting
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visiting
staying
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and staying
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 on cruise ships and another one is
visting
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visiting
 staying
on
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island
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the island
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.
Toursits
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Tourists
 have started to visit
stayin
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staying
 on
cruise
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a cruise
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ship
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ships
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 from the
year
 2010 ,0.3million have
began
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 to
vist
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visit
 the
Caribbean
island
 staying from
ship
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the ship
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 and it has slightly increased
year
 by
year
. In the
year
 2017 ,
toursit
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tourists
 had
a
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an
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intrest
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interest
to visit
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in visiting
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Caribbean
island
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islands
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 by staying from
ship
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the ship
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 and it
finally
 rose to
2million
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2 million
toursits
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tourists
. Some
tourists
 started to
vist
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visit
 the
island
 by staying on
island
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the island
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. In the
year
2010
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2010,
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 it was
1.3million
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1.3 million
 and there was no interest in
toursit
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tourist
tourists
to visit
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visiting
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 the
island
 for three years 2013, 2014 2015
respectively
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. In the
year
 2016, there was
decrease
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a decrease
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 and it has
inceased
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increased
 to
1.5milions of
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1.5 million
 visitors in
the
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2017 compared to others. In
the
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total, there
is
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has been
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 rapid growth from
the
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2010 to 2017
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from 1million
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1million
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1 million
 visitors to 3.5
million
 visitors.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, caribbean, island, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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