Mrs Barret, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for a few hours each day. Write a letter to Mrs, Barret. In your letter suggest how you could help her say why you would like to do this work explain when you would will and will not be available
Dear Mrs. Barret,
I am writing
this
letter as I saw your advertisement in the local newspaper that you are looking forward to hiring a house
assistant for 6 hours a day.
I am wondering if this
job is amazing for me according to
my qualifications because I have a 2 year
diploma-degree in housekeeping from Add a hyphen
2-year
well-known
university in your area. Not only Add an article
a well-known
this
, but I also
have a
5 years Correct article usage
apply
Change preposition
of experiences
experiences
as Fix the agreement mistake
experience
housekeeper
in Add an article
a housekeeper
local
hotel and 3 years Add an article
a local
the local
Change preposition
of experiences
experiences
as Fix the agreement mistake
experience
house
assistant for my Correct article usage
a house
neighbor
.
Change the spelling
neighbour
In addition
, my house
is not far away from your house
. Hence
, it is plus
point for me as I do not need to commute early morning Correct article usage
a plus
also
I can quicky
go to your Correct your spelling
quickly
house
if you need something or ask for help.
Nevertheless
, I am glad that I will get this
opportunity to work as your house
assistant. I would be thankful if you consider me as the best candidate for this
job.
Sincerely
YohanesSubmitted by patricius.yohanes on
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task response
To enhance your letter, consider discussing more specifically how you could help Mrs. Barret based on her needs. Mentioning particular tasks or ways your skills can be utilized will strengthen your response.
coherence and cohesion
While your letter is well-structured, improving the transitions between paragraphs could enhance the flow. Consider using phrases that better connect your ideas for increased cohesion.
greeting and closing
Your opening and closing are polite and appropriate, effectively setting and concluding the tone of the letter.
logical structure
You've done well to organize your letter, with each paragraph introducing a new idea or piece of information relevant to your application.
suitable writing tone
Your tone throughout the letter is suitably formal and respectful, matching the context of applying for a position to assist in someone's home.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite