The chart below gives information about the most common sports played in New Zealand in 2002.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of
most
famous Correct article usage
the most
sports
played by girls
and boys
in the year 2002 in New Zealand. It can be interpreted that Netball is the favourite game of girls
and on contrary
Correct article usage
the contrary
boys
are least interested in that while
they spend their time playing Soccer.
To begin
with
less than 5 per Add a comma
with,
cent
females
are interested in cricket when compared to Change preposition
of females
boys
a medicore
number of males love Correct your spelling
mediocre
the
Cricket on the other side Athletics is almost common in both the groups equally Correct article usage
apply
while
girls
are leding
with 2 per Correct your spelling
leading
cent
. Martial arts is not very common in girls
and 12% of boys
enjoys
it as a Change the verb form
enjoy
sports
.
Basketball and Tennis attracted almost equal Correct the article-noun agreement
sport
number
from both the groups. Netball is the most common Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
sports
for women with about 25 per Fix the agreement mistake
sport
cent
love to take part in it and almost negligible number of boys
are interested in it. Soccer is mostly common in boys
with girls
Correct pronoun usage
who seems
seems
5 per Correct subject-verb agreement
seem
cent
interested in it. Swimming is also
coomon
in Correct your spelling
common
girls
and boys
also
like to do so.
To conclude
out of the eight most common games boys
seems
to be Correct subject-verb agreement
seem
intersted
in seven games more than Correct your spelling
interested
girls
which means boys
are more interested in sports
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