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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
production
 of three main kinds of
fuel
 in
the
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great
Britian
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Britain
 in the past nineteen years. An increase can be seen in petroleum
production
 during the two
decdaes
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decades
while
 a decrease can be
noticied
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noticed
notified
 in coal
production
 one of the most important fossil fuels.
Overall
, the main
source
 of
fuel
since
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 1981-2000 was petroleum and
it's
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production
 peaked
at
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in
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 1987 when it touched 120 after
than
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that
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 in 1991 a decline can be
noticied
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noticed
notified
 in
production
 but it recovered it. Natural gas was
also
 used as a
source
 of
fuel
 and its
production
 remained almost constant all
overthe
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over the
 period,
while
 coal
is
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also
 used as a
fuel
source
 and its
production
 was 80 in 1981
then
 decreased to 40 but
then
 a steady trend can be seen.
To sum up
, petroleum is the most used and main
source
 of
fuel
while
 coal is
also
 used but
production
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the production
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 of natural gas is not much in
UK
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the UK
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, fuel, source with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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