The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008 Summarise the information be selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs provide data about what the UK graduate and postgraduate
students
did after graduated
from school in 2008 that they did not participate in full-time jobs.
By and large, it can be seen that both graduate and postgraduate Wrong verb form
graduating
students
tended to join further
study the most while
voluntary work
was not paid attention.
Speaking of the UK graduate students
, the first place belonged to further
study with 29665 students
. While
part-time work
accounted for the second place with 17735 students
, unemployment followed closely with 16235 students
. By contrast
, voluntary occupied the least with 3500 students
.
As regards the UK postgraduate students
, the figure for further
study was about 2725 students
, followed nearly by part-time work
with 2535 students
. The third place belonged to unemployment with 1625 students
. Finally
, just about 345 students
participated in voluntary work
.Submitted by weezel on
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