the charts below show the average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unheaalthy if eaten too much
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pie
chart below illustrates the medium percentage in ordinary meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may have bad
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a bad
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snacks
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breakfast
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sodium
in snacks
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breakfast
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sugar
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dinner
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sugar
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breakfast
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, percent, sodium, sugar, breakfast, dinner, snacks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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