mineral fuels are the primary source of energy in many nations, but in some regions the use of renewable source of energy are encouraged
in
this
period of time, mineral fuels are the primary source
of energy
in many nations, but in some regions
the use of renewable Add a comma
regions,
source
of Fix the agreement mistake
sources
energy
are
encouraged. some of the Change the verb form
is
negatives
effects of using mineral Fix the agreement mistake
negative
fuel
are raising
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rising
earth
temperatures, in my Change noun form
earth's
opinion
it is a positive development as it contains many advantages factors like reducing pollution levels Add the comma(s)
opinion,
along with
that it will boost the economy as it is cheap and abundant in nature without having no limitation like the non renewable
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non-renewable
source
pf
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of
energy
.
To embark on, green energy
sources are eco friendly
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eco-friendly
limitless
in nature as they are generated from air and sunshine, which are Correct word choice
and limitless
clean
and everlasting Add an article
a clean
source
of power which will Fix the agreement mistake
sources
also
contribute to a cleaner environment as it done
not Add the auxiliary verb
did
has done
any
harmful effects on the flora and fauna Add a missing verb
have any
moreover
, usage of clean energy
protect the environment as it can mitigate global warming by reducing hazardous emissions of green house
gases Correct your spelling
greenhouse
in to
the atmosphere which will Join the words
into
also
directly lowers the global temperatures to a great extend as it reduces CO2 emissions, to exemplify, a recent article in DUBAIone magazine stated that the use of clean energy
had an effect on the camels
populations in the united Arab Change to a genitive case
camel's
camels'
emerits
which increased by 4% since 1999 to 2023. Correct your spelling
merits
emeritus
demerits
thus
, these are the advantageous side of using clean source
of Fix the agreement mistake
sources
energy
.
the impact of using nonrenewable energy
are huge
economical burden in many countries, from extracting to delivering Add an article
a huge
and
processing and importing, to give an example, the cost of importing Correct word choice
apply
fuel
in Jordan is skyrocketing which the country Correct subject-verb agreement
uses
use
to generate electricity, Correct subject-verb agreement
uses
furthermore
the average Jordanian spending on Add a comma
furthermore,
fuel
are
high and many live in poverty, Change the verb form
is
in
addition
high Add the comma(s)
addition,
fuel
prices increases
almost every aspect of life, Change the verb form
increase
as a
result
many are struggling to start a business and the government cut spending on Add the comma(s)
result,
devoloping
projects.
in conclusion, I fully agree that the uses of clean Correct your spelling
developing
energy
are safer on
the environment and must be encouraged globally as an alternative Change preposition
for
source
of power.Submitted by vivaalain on
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