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The two pie charts provide information about boys and girls’ participation rates in various activities after the survey.

The two pie charts provide information about boys and girls’ participation rates in various activities after the survey.
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The given pie charts
illustrates
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 data
around
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on
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a participation rates
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participation rates
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 in Cultural and Leisure activities after the survey ,
according to
 boys and girls into six main categories.
Overall
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a
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Computer Games the highest
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 activities ;
wherese
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where
whereas
 lowest rate among
a
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participation in guys that Reading.In
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the girls
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girls
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girl's
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 sections, It was a ratio of the majority
a
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Dancing, In
constrate
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contrast
a
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Listening to music
that
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the
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 lowest category. In fact , boys
They
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prefer to spend much of
time
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their time
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 on Computer Games 34% ,
then
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than
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 about 26%
in play
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playing
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Basektball
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Basketball
;
In addition
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in
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Listening to music
unlike
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a
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girls.
Reading
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 rate reached
at
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2%
form
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from
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 a small percentage;
fortherefore
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therefore
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, Skateboarding
It
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accounted for less than a quarter.
On the other hand
 , in
section
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the section
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female
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females
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is Dancing
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danced
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 more than
another
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the others
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27
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is 27
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% same
alomst
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as
in
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for
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male
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males
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 for Basketball.
However
, Readeing The percentage reached second
according to
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whaile
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while
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a
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Computer Games
16
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% less than approximately more a half 34%. Netball is 1.5 out of 10 prefer to spend time playing it.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • survey
  • comparison
  • popularity
  • activities
  • gender-specific
  • predominantly
  • societal factors
  • psychological factors
  • development
  • teamwork
  • physical health
  • cognitive skills
  • educational policies
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