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A man called Pete who is friend of friend, is planning to visit town. Write a letter to Pete. In your letter introduce yourself suggest somethings to do in your town mention one thing you would not recommend

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Hey Pete, How are you doing? I heard from Mamia that you are coming to Toronto
this
 week. She told me to take good care of you
as well as
 give you a heads up on what to expect in the city. As you already know my name, let me tell you a bit about myself. I have recently completed my postgrad degree from Trent University and am planning to apply for my permanent residency in Canada. Right now, I am
inbetween
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in between
in-between
 jobs so I have a lot of leisure time to show you around. I would love for you to call me when you arrive. I have quite a few things planned for our adventure including sightseeing near the CN Tower, going to the Royal Ontario
Musuem
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Museum
 and
ofcourse
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of course
 checking out the beaches. The weather will be pretty warm during the week so we can easily roam around the city.
However
, I would not recommend that you go kayaking during
this
 time. I know you have been wanting to do that but the wind can be unpredictable now and a
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 accidents are taking place. We can do all
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 of fun activities other than that. I am really looking forward to exploring with you. See you soon! Samiha Reza
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Tone
Try to use a more formal greeting in your letters, even if you know the person. It helps set the tone for the letter.
Content
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to maintain clarity throughout your letter.
Structure
Include more varied sentence structures and transitions to enhance the flow of your writing.
Introduction
You've effectively introduced yourself, making the letter personal and engaging.
Content
Your suggestions on what to do and what not to do in the town are clear and helpful.
Tone
The tone of your letter is friendly and welcoming, which is suitable for writing to a person you are about to meet.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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