The chart below shows the depth of snow (in cm) in a particular ski resort in Canada in three individuals years.

The chart below shows the depth of snow (in cm) in a particular ski resort in Canada in three individuals years.
The given chart provides information on centimetres of
snow
laid in specific ski areas in Canada in three particular years from November to April.
Overall
, it can seen in the chart that ski destinations in Canada start snowing heavily from February to April as opposed to other months despite the
year
.
Moreover
, it raises in order over the given months. The only month when the average
snow
depth slightly fluctuated from approximately 90 to 110
cm
in all given years is November. In
december
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and
January
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January,
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the least proportion of
snow
was in the second
year
(at about 60 and 120
cm
respectively) and both reached their picks at 150 and almost 200 appropriately in the third
year
. In February and March of
year
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years
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two and three the depth of
snow
was the same 400 and 350
cm
respectively, only in the first month they had
at
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around
10
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a 10
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cm
difference. In
april
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April
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, the
snow
deepness rocketed from
year
one to
year
two with
the
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a
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variance of a bit over 100
cm
and reached the bottom in the final
year
which was 300
cm
.
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