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Children learn best by observing behavior of adults and copying it. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is thought by some people that children's behaviour comes from observing and copying
adults
while
 others believe it is not
adults
 who affect youths' behaviour, In the following paragraphs,
this
 issue will be outlined before reaching my conclusion. On the one hand, it is true that both the behaviour and
actions
 of the new generations come from
adults
 as they have always been told to follow their steps if the kids want to become successful.
However
, some families have violent
actions
,
for instance
, a father always blows a mother in front of their offspring just because of a little argument.
Consequently
, their offspring might learn from that situation and understand and imitate
this
 action in case it is the choice for them to take action when others do not listen to them.
On the other hand
, youngsters are not influenced by the older generations, having said that by their friends. Adolescents spend most of their time in school and around these ages, they need acceptance from their friends.
Thus
, when they see other children are acceptable by doing something in notorious ways
such
 as drinking alcohol, drugs, smoking, fighting, etc. They will copy those
actions
 in order to acquire acceptance and praise from their friends as well.
Overall
, in my opinion, I disagree with
this
 matter
as a result
 new generations spend most of their time studying in schools and want to be accepted.
Hence
, it means their classmates will have more effects on their behaviours and
actions
 than
adults
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Introduction & Conclusion
Ensure a clear thesis statement is presented in the introduction to directly address the prompt.
Supporting Examples
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Argument Balance
Strive for a balanced discussion in 'agree or disagree' essays by clearly addressing the extent of your agreement or disagreement throughout.
Grammar & Expression
Be mindful of minor grammatical errors and work on sentence structure to ensure clarity and precision in your expression.
Structure
The essay presents a clear structure with distinct introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
Linking Words
You effectively use linking words to connect ideas, improving the readability of your essay.
Balanced Argument
The essay demonstrates a good ability to present and counter different viewpoints, showing a range of thought.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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